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tomato haiku

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a local contest:  tomato haiku.  and i thought, why not?  a perfect writing prompt. unfortunately, my ability to even count accurately to 5 and 7 has been frustratingly difficult. so if there are one too few or too many syllables, blame the chemo.

tumbles of heavy juice fat
fruit in red and orange
mute tomato love untouched

cherry in size the number
uncounted weapons
fruit paint balls for little boys

so lovely in shape and curve
the color unmarred
but wait! a bite! which small child?

love apple streaks of green, red
sweet slices laid out
for a lover to enjoy

at 2 she wanders the rows
eating beans peppers
tomatoes drip from hand, mouth

white tomatoes ghostly fruit
are you meant to be
eaten or just exalted

the plants died tomatoes left
half-grown not yet red
the culprit? a black walnut

Written by senua

July 17, 2009 at 11:23 pm

Posted in Creative prompts

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10 Responses

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  1. These are wonderful, Sen! I especially loved the last one. How very often the thief has left a walnut in my own gardens!

    Steph

    willingness

    July 18, 2009 at 12:58 am

  2. wonderful i will be thinking about tomatoes all day (:

    pearlz

    July 18, 2009 at 3:21 am

  3. Delightful observations and imagery, Sen.

    Barbara--porchsitter

    July 18, 2009 at 3:42 pm

  4. These are really wonderful. Who would think a subject like tomatoes could sound so beautiful and well, poetic? But it does!

    cydlee61

    July 18, 2009 at 3:46 pm

  5. I love tomatoes in any way, shape, or form. Just reading about them sets my juices to flowing. Good work, Sen

    Vi

    woodnymph

    July 18, 2009 at 4:13 pm

  6. This is beautiful! Now I need to go eat some tomatoes! I especially love “fruit paint balls for little boys”.

    Sarah Joyce Bryant

    July 18, 2009 at 6:47 pm

  7. Fabulous – all these are so evocative – great stuff 🙂

    Jill

    July 19, 2009 at 5:16 pm

  8. I’ve always been a ‘mater hater, but I may have to reconsider after this beautiful prose. I must admit, I am tempted…Good to see your words again. Gigantic hugs!

    Sally

    July 20, 2009 at 9:19 pm

  9. these tomato poems are wonderful – celebrate the ordinary, the taken-for-granted wonders all around us…

    kvwordsmith

    July 22, 2009 at 8:13 pm

  10. such wonderful imagery

    Tabitha

    July 23, 2009 at 7:41 pm


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