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Another Collaborative Post

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My friend, Shiloh, (you remember Shiloh, right?) introduced me to some challenging and lovely forms of the art of Haiku,   It started with her asking if I had ever heard of a Chain Lanturne Haiku.  After she showed me her writing. I suggested we each write a chain on the same general subject, since Shiloh had already written one, I followed the basic imagery she created and went from there.

We researched the form at the following links:

http://home.tampabay.rr.com/memawscorne/Senryu,%20Tanka,Lantern,Chain%20Lanter

Poets and Poetry

Shadow Poetry — Resources — Haiku and Senryu

HAIKU TECHNIQUES Jane Reichhold

So, with all of this crowding about and vyiing for your attention, here are our attempts.

 

Wasp,
black and
yellow body,
settles on red
rose.

Bloom
opening,
brilliant red
petals swirling
open.

Then
sunset
ere night falls,
petals close in,
fold.

High
distant
near full moon,
silver blossoms’
edge.
Gwen M. Myers 

 

Bee
buzzes,
alighting
on a yellow
rose.

Sun
sets, pink,
lavender,
orange paint the
sky.

Dawn
heralds
a new day
with a pearly
light.

Rose
petals
open, a
yellow jacket
flees.

Night
falls, the
rose gently
closes. Pleasant
dreams…

Moon,
ghostly
orb hanging
o’er high mountain
peaks.

Shiloh Cannon Blackburn.

May 25, 2008

You can also see Shiloh’s post at:

http://sunnydreamer.net/aprjun2008/chain-lanturne.shtml

 

I hope you enjoy both posts, and want to come back for more!!

Written by gwenguin1

May 27, 2008 at 2:54 am

8 Responses

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  1. I enjoyed these and liked the centred form. Fran

    Fran

    May 27, 2008 at 3:11 am

  2. Haiku are lovely word pictures! These are great!

    imogen88

    May 27, 2008 at 3:15 am

  3. Beautiful images in words.

    Lori

    May 27, 2008 at 12:48 pm

  4. I’ve not seen this form of Haiku before. I really like it. I love the mind picture both pieces create.

    Vi

    woodnymph

    May 27, 2008 at 2:43 pm

  5. a vertiable garden!

    kvwordsmith

    May 27, 2008 at 4:36 pm

  6. Beautiful in form and words.

    shewolfy728

    May 27, 2008 at 9:06 pm

  7. These are beautiful. The visual imagery created by the words and the way they are placed is striking..shall certainly be back for more.

    Jill

    May 28, 2008 at 1:24 pm

  8. Gwen, both were exquisite! As someone who writes Haiku poetry, I had not heard of Lighting a Chain Lanturne. What a lovely concept! Genece

    espirit07

    May 28, 2008 at 2:13 pm


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